Thread regarding Corinthian Colleges Inc. layoffs

Let's face it. This was all about ONE success story - Cariee's. She's making the big bucks and doesn't want it to end! "Lord I love the Magnificent Mile, please oh please don't make me go back to Target!"

Amen to about every reply I've read in this thread!

That letter proves leadership's f***ed up mentality that they can say whatever they want and they will be believed. It's gone on so long at our schools. Even she can't think that was in ANY way a well written letter?!?'

647, Perfectly Stated!

28636, Exactly!!!

Here's an idea: if a student realizes that traditional community college wasn't "for them," how about the student make some personal sacrifices and take personal accountability for their education? I've known plenty of students who have failed out of community college only to go back and give it another try, after having made some personal changes and improving their study habits. The for profit sector plays on that notion of giving the "underserved" what they need. In rwlity, that applies to maybe one student a year. I believe all students deserve an education, but 99% of them are not prepared to make the sacrifices it takes to earn one. Sorry, but if you work three jobs and have three kids and are a single parent with no Internet access, YOU DO NOT BELONG IN ONLINE SCHOOL. If you can't read or write at higher than a 5th grade level, YOU ARE NOT COLLEGE MATERIAL. Maybe you will be someday, but for Everest to tell you that you can be remediated in one 12 week term, and suddenly go from barely literate to mastering A PA format is WRONG. And it's deceitful. And no, Carrie, we do not help teach them basic life skills, because we don't offer classes on Hard Work, Patience, and Integrity, something the students Everest caters to could stand to take.Then again, we'd just let them.hand in all of their late work at the end of the semester so they could pass.

Anonymous28645- The individual attention is outreach. Once a student doesn't attend, you give such student individual attention.

I'd like her to outline in detail exactly it is we are to give "individual" attention when our classes (at least online) have just as many if not more students than a traditional college.

You instructors need to get back to doing what you do best: Outreach. lol We all know that grading work is not important.

633, what success story? She didn't mention one with any detail.

As an instructor for Everest, I'm embarrassed by this letter that contains an utter lack of information. If that was turned in to me as a persuasive draft, I would give it a 6/10 for grammar/word choice/conventions and a 4/5 for content. It's vague at best, not compelling, and completely unsupported by facts. Is this a real letter? That's the best our Director of Education could do? No wonder we are tanking. That's an an embarrassment. Durbin is laughing his ass off right now.

The problem with her argument, is the following. CCi is a "for profit" school that promotes a quality education and a job/career upon graduation, but "under delivers". Universities and community colleges are cheaper and offer accredited education platforms. They do not make a promise that you will get a job, after graduation.

One success story justifies keeping all of CCi.

This draft does not move or persuade your reader in any way. Without specific details and support, your ideas are vague and not persuasive. For instance, which students are you discussing, specifically? Can you give Durbin some names, so he can check your argument for himself? Also, why do you feel the curriculum is string and worthy of mentioning? Could you tell us some actual facts? What is the real retention rate? What can you tell Durbin about the Outreach program and why it's needed, if your students at Everest are doing so well? Where are graduates getting jobs, exactly? Unless you flesh out some if this information, your argument will not hold up. Read the Chapter on Persuading Your Audience that is in the textbook. Grade for content: D

Dear Cariee:

This is a good first draft of a letter that discusses some serious issues. Given your position as an academic leader and the importance of the person to whom you're writing, I'd like to see another draft before the assignment is complete. In my detailed comments below I'll stick to the first paragraph, since that's all that I could stomach.

"opposition of" ? Perhaps you meant "opposition to"

"I have held positions that include;" Why a semi-colon? With this sentence construction you don't need any punctuation to precede the list. If you really want something, at least try a colon.

"campus-level" You are not using this as a compound adjective (e.g. "campus-level practices"), so there is no need for a hyphen.

"In my personal experience" Redundant. It's clear from the sentence that you're speaking from your personal experience.

"poses curiosity"? Okay, we understand what you mean, but you can't pose curiosity. You could simply say, "is curious". Keep is simple and direct whenever possible.

Well, I skipped accidently to the next paragraph and I see another incorrect semi-colon. Stick to my undergraduate American Lit professor's advice: if you don't understand how to use them simply avoid them.

Please don't be discouraged: college writing is like any other learned skill and it takes time to master. I'm sure by the end of the course your writing will be significantly improved and you'll be ready for Comp II.

Grade for this draft: C.

Sincerely,

Not a Corinthian Instructor.

That was a load of crap.

Bet it's hilariously stupid. Like Jenkins' crap comments.